[epsi-coord] Update Tech report

[Ton Zijlstra]

Hi all,

In the dropbox you will find a new
document ePSIplatform_TR1_revised_v03_word with the latest version of the
tech report.

It's become rather long (40 pages),
it follows the structure and content of the proposal more closely
it gives much more examples and detail concerning our actual actions

Chapter 1 and 2 are now finished. Chapter 3 (summarizing and list of
actions for next period) is still to be done.

Marc, as agreed this afternoon, can you start with proofreading chapter 1
and especially chapter 2.?

Please do not start revisioning for general tone or style, or suggesting
complete rewrites. We don't have time for that. Actual corrections
(spelling / facts), and suggestions for replacements for text fragments are
very welcome.
More bluntly put: only correct what is wrong or clearly missing, and what
should not be send out this way. No further embellishments.

After Marc has gone through it please pass it along to e.g. Hans.

best,

Ton
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