[okfn-br] [URGENTE!] Ajuda na tradução da carta contra o #PLespião

Quarta Setembro 30 21:52:22 UTC 2015

Pessoal,
Dia muito corrido, entrando em aula em breve. Desculpe, dessa vez não pude
ajudar.
Helo

On Wed, Sep 30, 2015 at 12:31 PM, Bruno Pinheiro <bruno.lahunmen em gmail.com>
wrote:

> Caros,
> ontem quando cheguei em casa à noite o Carlos já havia feito o serviço.
> Achei que ficou bom!
> Abraços,
> Bruno
>
> 2015-09-30 8:32 GMT-03:00 Everton Zanella Alvarenga <tom em ok.org.br>:
>
>> Revisei agora cedo a maior parte das contribuições do Carlos (obrigado!)
>> aqui nesse gdocs
>> <https://docs.google.com/document/d/1i7szBGL8fWZikmwemuA96bsEzlb0xEPZ4YqRY6yRxmA/edit?userstoinvite=everton137@gmail.com&ts=560abca4>.
>> Transcrevo abaixo como ficou. Contribuições aqui ou no gdcos bem-vindas.
>>
>>
>> *Watch out! The Brazilian Congress is trying to butcher the Brazilian
>> Civil Rights Framework for the Internet!*
>> *Civil society organizations gathered in the coalition pro Internet
>> Rights law ('Articulação Marco Civil Já!') already repudiate parliamentary
>> initiatives that threaten the internet users privacy and freedom of
>> expression.*
>>
>>
>> *There are currently bills in the House of Representatives that threaten
>> one of the most important democratic gains of the last period - the
>> approval of the Brazilian Civil Rights Framework for the Internet (“Marco
>> Civil da Internet” - MCI), Law 12.965/2014. The MCI ensures fundamental
>> rights to network users, such as privacy and freedom of expression in line
>> with internationally accepted guidelines of Internet governance.*
>> Encouraged by private sectors of great economic power and their
>> self-interest to restrain criticism of movements backed by the right to
>> freedom of expression, parliamentarians presented  bills in the House that
>> change the MCI.
>>
>> PL 215/2015 - a bill presented by Brazilian representative Hildo Rocha
>> (PMDB), and its attachments - PL 1547/2015 authored by Expedito Netto, and
>> PL 1589/2015 by Soraya  Santos - seeks to include harsher punishments into
>> articles 48 and 141 of Brazil's Criminal Code to inhibit social network
>> users crimes. Furthermore, the bill changes provisions of MCI, modifying
>> articles 10, 13, 15, 19 and adding article 21-A. These changes grant public
>> authorities access to data from Internet users with no need of a court
>> order, and mandatory removal of published online content after a simple
>> allegation of crime against honor, which also impose individual and
>> economic restriction penalties to internet providers deeply compromising
>> the principles of non-accountability on the internet. User's data that
>> authorities will be able to  obtain without a warrant include all online
>> communication - content from e-mails, online chat and conversations through
>> messenger apps such as Skype and Whatsapp.
>>
>> The bill 215/2015 puts at risk the necessary balance between protecting
>> the right to privacy and the criminal prosecution as well as democracy
>> itself by allowing such abuses.
>>
>> Such proposals have already been rejected in the course of MCI.
>> Incidentally, it is worth noting that the devices now present in the MCI
>> were the result of a broad social debate and an intense political
>> negotiation, which makes this one of the most democratic laws already voted
>> in the recent history of Brazil’s National Congress.
>>
>> We believe that any change in MCI should be preceded by a qualified
>> discussion, supported by technical considerations, political and social. It
>> is needed, mostly, intense democratic participation equivalent to the
>> process from which it originated, with a public consultation process, so
>> that society interests can be represented regarding personal data
>> protection and freedom of expression on the internet.
>>
>> We know that a very significant wing of the PMDB frontally opposed to the
>> approval of MCI, representing conservatory and powerful economic interests
>> agents. However, such interest can not override the safeguards established
>> by the democratic legislative process and the public interest as so overly
>> advocated in MCI's debate.
>>
>> The initiative of the mentioned representatives undermines the Rule of
>> Law principles, in that it reveals itself as retaliation for established
>> rights, even before the MCI being regulated, with the clear objective to
>> reverse the victory that Brazilian society had in Congress .
>>
>> Therefore, entities gathered in coalition pro Internet Rights Law
>> repudiate the artful maneuver and anti-democratic action carried forward by
>> the PMDB, which stimulates the arbitrary vigilantism and unreasonable
>> censorship, impairing the Rule of Law. We require that the representatives
>> wait for the democratic process already established by the Executive and
>> the bill of Personal Data Protection which will address the same issue,
>> however, with broad participation.
>>
>> Original a título de comparação: http://plespiao.org.br/
>>
>>
>> 2015-09-29 21:15 GMT-03:00 Carlos Andrade <carlosviansi em gmail.com>:
>>
>>> Eu tentei corrigir o máximo possível em todos os paragrafos, estão em
>>> modo revisão para vocês decidirem. Não conheço o vocabulário americano para
>>> política, então os nomes precisam ser verificados se significam mesmo as
>>> mesmas coisas para o pessoal aqui (EUA) e/ou outros lugares. Alguns
>>> cuidados a tomar é com a consistência dos nomes que não foi mantida pelo
>>> tradutor (e.g. Articulação Marco Civil Já logo no inicio e ao fim do texto).
>>>
>>> Um parágrafo completo estava faltando do PLEspião:
>>>
>>> Na sétima e última versão do substitutivo, a proposta ainda prevê a
>>> ampliação dos dados cadastrais a serem coletados pelos provedores de
>>> internet, impondo a obrigação de reterem dados como endereço completo,
>>> telefone e CPF, que poderão ser repassados, sem ordem judicial, para
>>> autoridades que tenham atribuição legal para fazer esse pedido.
>>>
>>> O qual me parece ser extremamente importante não estar faltando!
>>>
>>> Coloquei ele lá no documento como lembrete. Acho também que seria
>>> interessante colocar um link para as leis mencionadas. Por fim, eu não sei
>>> o que será feito do texto em inglês, mas se o objetivo for divulgação e/ou
>>> assinaturas como a versão em pt ou a página da OKFN-BR, sugiro reduzir o
>>> número de adjetivos do texto original criticando partidos. pessoas e
>>> filosofia de atentado a isso e aquilo ir direto ao ponto, que pelo se
>>> resume a o que é a Lei 12.965/2014 (MCI), a PL 215/2015, os artigos
>>> modificados e o que passaria a entrar em vigor (parágrafo acima e começando
>>> a falar sobre a PL 215/2015). Apesar de tanto paragrafo também não me ficou
>>> claro no documento a urgência dele e/ou links para acompanhamento do mesmo.
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>
>>
>> --
>> Everton Zanella Alvarenga
>> Open Knowledge Brasil
>>
>> _______________________________________________
>> okfn-br mailing list
>> okfn-br em lists.okfn.org
>> https://lists.okfn.org/mailman/listinfo/okfn-br
>> Unsubscribe: https://lists.okfn.org/mailman/options/okfn-br
>>
>>
>
-------------- Próxima Parte ----------
Um anexo em HTML foi limpo...
URL: <http://lists.okfn.org/pipermail/okfn-br/attachments/20150930/00e30607/attachment-0005.html>