[okfn-br] [URGENTE!] Ajuda na tradução da carta contra o #PLespião

Quarta Setembro 30 15:31:10 UTC 2015

Caros,
ontem quando cheguei em casa à noite o Carlos já havia feito o serviço.
Achei que ficou bom!
Abraços,
Bruno

2015-09-30 8:32 GMT-03:00 Everton Zanella Alvarenga <tom em ok.org.br>:

> Revisei agora cedo a maior parte das contribuições do Carlos (obrigado!)
> aqui nesse gdocs
> <https://docs.google.com/document/d/1i7szBGL8fWZikmwemuA96bsEzlb0xEPZ4YqRY6yRxmA/edit?userstoinvite=everton137@gmail.com&ts=560abca4>.
> Transcrevo abaixo como ficou. Contribuições aqui ou no gdcos bem-vindas.
>
>
> *Watch out! The Brazilian Congress is trying to butcher the Brazilian
> Civil Rights Framework for the Internet!*
> *Civil society organizations gathered in the coalition pro Internet Rights
> law ('Articulação Marco Civil Já!') already repudiate parliamentary
> initiatives that threaten the internet users privacy and freedom of
> expression.*
>
>
> *There are currently bills in the House of Representatives that threaten
> one of the most important democratic gains of the last period - the
> approval of the Brazilian Civil Rights Framework for the Internet (“Marco
> Civil da Internet” - MCI), Law 12.965/2014. The MCI ensures fundamental
> rights to network users, such as privacy and freedom of expression in line
> with internationally accepted guidelines of Internet governance.*
> Encouraged by private sectors of great economic power and their
> self-interest to restrain criticism of movements backed by the right to
> freedom of expression, parliamentarians presented  bills in the House that
> change the MCI.
>
> PL 215/2015 - a bill presented by Brazilian representative Hildo Rocha
> (PMDB), and its attachments - PL 1547/2015 authored by Expedito Netto, and
> PL 1589/2015 by Soraya  Santos - seeks to include harsher punishments into
> articles 48 and 141 of Brazil's Criminal Code to inhibit social network
> users crimes. Furthermore, the bill changes provisions of MCI, modifying
> articles 10, 13, 15, 19 and adding article 21-A. These changes grant public
> authorities access to data from Internet users with no need of a court
> order, and mandatory removal of published online content after a simple
> allegation of crime against honor, which also impose individual and
> economic restriction penalties to internet providers deeply compromising
> the principles of non-accountability on the internet. User's data that
> authorities will be able to  obtain without a warrant include all online
> communication - content from e-mails, online chat and conversations through
> messenger apps such as Skype and Whatsapp.
>
> The bill 215/2015 puts at risk the necessary balance between protecting
> the right to privacy and the criminal prosecution as well as democracy
> itself by allowing such abuses.
>
> Such proposals have already been rejected in the course of MCI.
> Incidentally, it is worth noting that the devices now present in the MCI
> were the result of a broad social debate and an intense political
> negotiation, which makes this one of the most democratic laws already voted
> in the recent history of Brazil’s National Congress.
>
> We believe that any change in MCI should be preceded by a qualified
> discussion, supported by technical considerations, political and social. It
> is needed, mostly, intense democratic participation equivalent to the
> process from which it originated, with a public consultation process, so
> that society interests can be represented regarding personal data
> protection and freedom of expression on the internet.
>
> We know that a very significant wing of the PMDB frontally opposed to the
> approval of MCI, representing conservatory and powerful economic interests
> agents. However, such interest can not override the safeguards established
> by the democratic legislative process and the public interest as so overly
> advocated in MCI's debate.
>
> The initiative of the mentioned representatives undermines the Rule of Law
> principles, in that it reveals itself as retaliation for established
> rights, even before the MCI being regulated, with the clear objective to
> reverse the victory that Brazilian society had in Congress .
>
> Therefore, entities gathered in coalition pro Internet Rights Law
> repudiate the artful maneuver and anti-democratic action carried forward by
> the PMDB, which stimulates the arbitrary vigilantism and unreasonable
> censorship, impairing the Rule of Law. We require that the representatives
> wait for the democratic process already established by the Executive and
> the bill of Personal Data Protection which will address the same issue,
> however, with broad participation.
>
> Original a título de comparação: http://plespiao.org.br/
>
>
> 2015-09-29 21:15 GMT-03:00 Carlos Andrade <carlosviansi em gmail.com>:
>
>> Eu tentei corrigir o máximo possível em todos os paragrafos, estão em
>> modo revisão para vocês decidirem. Não conheço o vocabulário americano para
>> política, então os nomes precisam ser verificados se significam mesmo as
>> mesmas coisas para o pessoal aqui (EUA) e/ou outros lugares. Alguns
>> cuidados a tomar é com a consistência dos nomes que não foi mantida pelo
>> tradutor (e.g. Articulação Marco Civil Já logo no inicio e ao fim do texto).
>>
>> Um parágrafo completo estava faltando do PLEspião:
>>
>> Na sétima e última versão do substitutivo, a proposta ainda prevê a
>> ampliação dos dados cadastrais a serem coletados pelos provedores de
>> internet, impondo a obrigação de reterem dados como endereço completo,
>> telefone e CPF, que poderão ser repassados, sem ordem judicial, para
>> autoridades que tenham atribuição legal para fazer esse pedido.
>>
>> O qual me parece ser extremamente importante não estar faltando!
>>
>> Coloquei ele lá no documento como lembrete. Acho também que seria
>> interessante colocar um link para as leis mencionadas. Por fim, eu não sei
>> o que será feito do texto em inglês, mas se o objetivo for divulgação e/ou
>> assinaturas como a versão em pt ou a página da OKFN-BR, sugiro reduzir o
>> número de adjetivos do texto original criticando partidos. pessoas e
>> filosofia de atentado a isso e aquilo ir direto ao ponto, que pelo se
>> resume a o que é a Lei 12.965/2014 (MCI), a PL 215/2015, os artigos
>> modificados e o que passaria a entrar em vigor (parágrafo acima e começando
>> a falar sobre a PL 215/2015). Apesar de tanto paragrafo também não me ficou
>> claro no documento a urgência dele e/ou links para acompanhamento do mesmo.
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>
>
>
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