[epsi-coord] Update Tech report - revs Marc

Tue Dec 27 20:26:41 GMT 2011

hi Hans, Marc,

thanks for your contributions. I've started to incorporate them into the
text. Tomorrow morning I will finish it and send it to Juan, before leaving
for Germany/Switzerland for a few days of vacationing.

best,
Ton
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On Tue, Dec 27, 2011 at 6:58 PM, Hans Graux <hans.graux at timelex.eu> wrote:

> Hi all,
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> I’ve reviewed the TR1, mainly to formalize the language a bit further and
> to add more substance to the 3rd section, as requested. You’ll find my
> updates in the drop box, same folder as before, now adding “revs Marc_Hans”
> to the title. I think it’s now mainly a matter of accepting/rejecting
> changes, checking layout, and reviewing the sections that are still marked;
> then it should be pretty much OK.
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> BR,
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> Hans
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> *Van:* epsi-coord-bounces at lists.okfn.org [mailto:
> epsi-coord-bounces at lists.okfn.org] *Namens *Marc de Vries
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> *Verzonden:* zondag 25 december 2011 17:09
> *Aan:* epsi-coord at lists.okfn.org
> *Onderwerp:* [epsi-coord] Update Tech report - revs Marc
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> Dear all,
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> Further to Ton’s request I have gone through Ton’s draft and inserted
> revisions (in the rev mode). The document is the drop box under the same
> title with added - ‘Revs Marc’.
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> In conformity with Ton’s suggestion, am now passing it on to Hans
> requesting him to perform a quick last check. Also, it would be good if you
> could add some substance to chapter 3: the lessons learned. This will
> alleviate Ton’s last working hours of this month to wrap things up.
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> Ton, there are a few points which require your attention. I marked them in
> yellow.
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> I will now proceed to catch the turkey in our garden.
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> Reg. M.
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> *Van:* epsi-coord-bounces at lists.okfn.org [mailto:
> epsi-coord-bounces at lists.okfn.org] *Namens *Ton Zijlstra
> *Verzonden:* zaterdag 24 december 2011 2:20
> *Aan:* epsi-coord at lists.okfn.org
> *Onderwerp:* [epsi-coord] Update Tech report
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> Hi all,
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> In the dropbox you will find a new
> document ePSIplatform_TR1_revised_v03_word with the latest version of the
> tech report.
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> It's become rather long (40 pages),
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> it follows the structure and content of the proposal more closely
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> it gives much more examples and detail concerning our actual actions
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> Chapter 1 and 2 are now finished. Chapter 3 (summarizing and list of
> actions for next period) is still to be done.
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> Marc, as agreed this afternoon, can you start with proofreading chapter 1
> and especially chapter 2.?
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> Please do not start revisioning for general tone or style, or suggesting
> complete rewrites. We don't have time for that. Actual corrections
> (spelling / facts), and suggestions for replacements for text fragments are
> very welcome.
>
> More bluntly put: only correct what is wrong or clearly missing, and what
> should not be send out this way. No further embellishments.
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> After Marc has gone through it please pass it along to e.g. Hans.
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> best,
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> Ton
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